건물의 역사.. 사람들이 관심가짐. 왜? cause and solution.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fik55c3185M&ab_channel=LilieIELTS 

 

몇몇 나라는, 더많은 사람들이 그들이 살고이는 건물의 역사에 대해 관심가짐. 왜 그럴까?, HOW CAN PEOPLE 연구하냐

CAUSES AND SOLUTIONS.

 

여기에 이유2개, how 솔루션 1개또는 2개인데. 

 

body1에 이유2개 넣는건 좋은방법이아님 왜? 모든 패라그래프는 하나의 main topic 필요하다함. 근대 2개가되버리면안됌.

이럴경우엔 바디를 3개로늘려라.  

 

질문이 what are the reasons 니까 2개대고. how can research니까 1개대고.

 

why is this the case 1, what can be done about this problem 1

7기준 .clear viewpoint throughout the response -> introduction.

 

Introduction

예시1. This essay will discuss the main causes of this phenomenon and suggest a possible solution

이건 말만한거지 내용이없다. count 되지않을것.

 

예시2.In some countries, there is a growing interest among people in tracing the history of their homes.

I think they research this for many reasons, perhaps out of interest, or to find a sense of connection

For help with finding answers, they should turn to the seniors in their neighborhoods. 굳.! breifly  하게 잘씀.

 

 

body 1: reason1 curious

Some people delve into the stories of their homes simply because they are curious. Many historical buildings

have been torn down.Many historical buildings have been torn down, which makes those that remain uncommon treasures in the city. As a result, it is likely that residents in the surviving buildings cannot help finding out more about them,such as when they were built and why they look the way they do.

 

단어: delve = due diligence

 

body2: reason 2 find a sense of connection

There are also people who do research to find a sense of connection. with concrete residential buildngs everywhere, neighborhoods nowadays look very alike and therefore it is hard for people to feel something special about where they live.However, by learning about the buildings that once stood there and the people who lived in them, for example,

a sense of connection and involvement may be fostered.

 

 

 

body 3: one solution. ask old people

The best way for people to explore, I believe, is to ask the elderly in their neighborhood. Many seniors have lived in the same neighborhood all their lives. They have seen it change around them. They have witnessed people coming and going. Talking to them can definitely help one uncover some intriguing stories of the place where one lives.

 

 

witnessed 목격하다.

 

 

 

conclusion

In conclusion, curiosity and a desire to seek a connection are two posssible reasons why people investigate the

history of their homes. To find answers, they should ask the old people in their neighborhood for help.